“Eveline” Story Treatment

The first scene I’d use a close up shot of Eveline leaning against a water dribbled window, while she plays with an engagement ring, remembering her childhood. The color being a contrast of the color used during her memory flashbacks. The internal memories will be represented through the reflection of the glass. As the camera zooms in, we will transfer into the memory inside the house. As to what the colors would be, I’m not sure, (perhaps just b;lack and white v.s. color), but her staring out the window would fade into her memories of childhood. The ones of her playing with friends would be more vibrant in color, while the moments of abuse from her father and all of the memories of after her mother died, but the scene of her mother on her deathbed while Eveline promises her to keep the home together as long as she could.

Then I’d want a CUT BACK TO Eveline holding Franks hand walking toward the boat with her while she looks over the envelopes, but we never really see Frank entirely. I’d also like Frank’s towering dark shadow to lurk over Eveline.

The we CUT BACK TO a memory of her mother ill in her bed, and this scene should be the longest in dialogue because it’s when Eveline promises to keep the family together for as long as possible. One idea that comes to mind is that Frank’s tall figure could cast a shadow over Eveline as they’re walking along a stark path towards the boat, through the crowds.

Then it would fade into the deathbed scene, and that would and should be very silent in contrast with the previous scene of a crowded dock. But it should be a very emotional scene for Eveline.

The ending scene would be of Eveline and Frank standing in the middle of a crowd trying to board the ship, and when she resists and looks emotionless I’d like the contrasting colors to come together somehow. Perhaps when the camera overlooks Eveline’s shoulder from behind, the background consisting of the ship will be black and white, and when it switches to a close up from the front I’d like the background to be colorful to represent the familiarity of home, but more deeper and darker shades of the colors given the stark reality of her home presently. To capture the certainty of her wretched home life and the uncertainty of whether or not her life with frank would be better, on top of the guilt from her last conversation with her mother needs to be shown here..perhaps a division of light on her face, meaning one side has a shadow and the other is lit up, yet her face is emotionless.

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